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Rainbow by ~Blissfulbutterfly:iconBlissfulbutterfly:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Nature > Open


Dandelions shyly giggling,
cheekily fidgeting
from the sway of the winds.
Sunrays break through the
delicate tears from the heavens,
merging together,
to form Blessed colors
gliding across the skies.
©2006-2009 ~Blissfulbutterfly
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Author's Comments

Rainbows are pretty.
Early morning rain
and the sun comes out.
The grass smells so fresh,
the rainbow looks so blessed.

:D

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~starsdie Dec 30, 2006, 10:39:22 AM
nice choice of words. yes, rainbows are pretty (:
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=Jedfire Dec 30, 2006, 4:32:29 PM
quite haiku-ish, beautiful imagery. :)

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~Blissfulbutterfly Dec 30, 2006, 6:36:18 PM
thank you :)

they are pretty! :D

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Thy frienship oft has made my heart to ache; do be my enemy for friendship's sake. - William Blake.
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~Blissfulbutterfly Dec 30, 2006, 6:36:37 PM
thank you Jed :)

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Thy frienship oft has made my heart to ache; do be my enemy for friendship's sake. - William Blake.
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Mood: Joy ~numeka Jan 1, 2007, 1:40:32 AM
I believe Jim Carrey said it best when he said.. B-E-A-uuutiful :worship:

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~InterLight Jan 1, 2007, 8:47:41 PM
-->Sunrays breaking through the
delicate tears from the heavens, <--

This bit is a little 'broken' for me. I guess it is just a feeling, but I think that a "the" at the end of the first line disturbs the flow into the second, syllable wise. I liked TheKingOfFall's idea about changing 'breaking' to 'break' I think it would change things.

Also I think sun rays is two words, though I am not one to ask about grammar :)
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~Blissfulbutterfly Jan 1, 2007, 8:50:03 PM
:giggle:

thanks...but before you commented i had changed 'breaking' to 'break' following ThekingofFall's comment :)

Thank you though once again :)

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Thy frienship oft has made my heart to ache; do be my enemy for friendship's sake. - William Blake.
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~hisalone17 Jan 3, 2007, 12:20:32 AM
Lol, for some reason it sounds haiku-ish for me. Good job good job. Yeap I'm back.. for awhile *groans*

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~hisalone17 Jan 3, 2007, 12:22:37 AM
Oh oops... I didn't realize Jed had already said that. Sorry...

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... If I can but remain in your shadows, I will live in the light forever ...
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