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Bleeding Love by ~Blissfulbutterfly:iconBlissfulbutterfly:

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Crisp white flakes touched with cold-
fluffy frosty- furiously flourishing.  
Red rose petals slowly fall,
Bleeding love
over the wintery bed.
Birds shakenly chirp-
humming a wounding melody,
whistling out their tiny hearts.
Harshness of the winds
freeze the heated silvery drops
sliding stonily, steadily down
pale cheeks.
©2006-2009 ~Blissfulbutterfly
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Author's Comments

It's a melancholic poem, i guess.
It was cold and my head was hurting so i thought i'd write something.
:roll:

Once again not very pleased with the outcome, but oh well.

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Mood: Sadness ~numeka Nov 28, 2006, 2:45:51 PM
Wow that's very sad...... great start to a beautiful morning! :)

Good stuff :clap:

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~Blissfulbutterfly Nov 28, 2006, 3:15:37 PM
haha yeah you know how i get when my head starts buzzing....I'm sorry that it's sad! :(

Thanks :)

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Thy frienship oft has made my heart to ache; do be my enemy for friendship's sake. - William Blake.
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=Jedfire Nov 30, 2006, 3:09:07 PM
It is a kind of melancholy snapshot, but beautiful nonetheless; my only critique would be the alliteration in the second line seems a little forced, and normal, everyday words are used (like cold, and touch) where there could be more interesting, expressive things happening. I really like how the imagery works, with the rose petals bleeding and the birdies chirping their little hearts out, sad yet natural and poignant. Well done, BlissfulButterfly!

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~Blissfulbutterfly Dec 1, 2006, 12:58:17 AM
eh i'll working on it! :salute:

thanks for the comment and critique :giggle:

:thanks:

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Thy frienship oft has made my heart to ache; do be my enemy for friendship's sake. - William Blake.
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~Blissfulbutterfly Dec 1, 2006, 12:58:50 AM
eh i'm working on it*
whoops :roll:

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Thy frienship oft has made my heart to ache; do be my enemy for friendship's sake. - William Blake.
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~vandollized Dec 1, 2006, 1:52:53 AM
Ah, quite depressing. I love the description in this poem. Excellent job. :clap:
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~Blissfulbutterfly Dec 1, 2006, 1:58:32 AM
:giggle: i don't mean to depress people, it just happens :shakefist:

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Thy frienship oft has made my heart to ache; do be my enemy for friendship's sake. - William Blake.
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~Blissfulbutterfly Dec 1, 2006, 2:15:36 AM
oh i forgot to say thanks for the comment :)

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Thy frienship oft has made my heart to ache; do be my enemy for friendship's sake. - William Blake.
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~vandollized Dec 1, 2006, 3:37:32 AM
you didn't depress me one bit, i'm more in awe :)
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